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Here is my comment wall for Women of Strength!:) The storybook is found here.

This image is from a Women of the Bible free e-book, found here

32 comments

  1. Hey Rachel!
    Love your first sentence! It is a lively energetic sentence and gives me a base idea of one of the themes of your storybook. I like that you included context about historical storytelling by saying that stories about women were not common in those eras. It adds to the importance of these characters and stories! You give a great roadmap of what is to come from your stories. By saying that you are staying close to the originals helps the reader know how much is being changed. Also, I like that you give examples of women that you will be telling stories about. You also give hints at what ideas, morals, and other character attributes will be challenged in your stories. In reference to your bottom paragraph, your approach to making the characters known on an internal level is a great idea for readers connecting with them. Great introduction post, Rachel!

  2. Hi Rachel,
    I really love the first sentence that welcomes everyone to your storybook. It has a way of drawing in the audience and showing them what your stories will potentially be about. How you include that these stories were not common in their eras really shows that they are going to be powerful stories. I love how you are going to keep them close to their original stories but give them modernized examples. I have read your stories and am excited to see the directions that you take them and how you modernize them. I know the women of the bible but am interested to see their stories and learn more. I am also looking forward to learning about the Greek mythology women because those stories I do not know. I also love the examples you give of the women that you will potentially talk about even ones that are less recognizable. I love your introduction!

  3. Hi Rachel!
    I love the first sentence of your introduction! I think it’s so true that stories of women are not always showcased in the light that they should be, and it’s time they’re recognized! With feminism on the forefront and women power being emphasized so much in these modern times, I think your storybook is going to be revolutionary – I know I’m already for it and you haven’t even written a story yet! I really love how you chose to focus on women who are more recognized and women who may not be that recognized, like Esther and Potiphar’s wife. I never even thought about how her name is not mentioned anywhere in the Bible until you mentioned that in your intro. I’m really looking forward to reading your stories once they come out – definitely bookmarking your storybook for future reference! Good luck with the rest of the semester and your stories!

  4. Hey Rachel! First off, good job! Your intro was really cool and interesting! I also really liked your first story. I think likening St. Christine to Fiona from Shrek was really creative. That really helps pull in readers who may have never read about women like her but know about modern cultural references like Fiona from Shrek. I think the anthropology idea was a good choice. It makes learning about historical characters or bible stories and mythology stories even more fun! I also like the picture you chose for the banner. The presentation of the whole website is really good. The only two things I would say is that the two different sizes of fonts on your first story kinda threw me off visually and the picture on the first story with St. Christine looked too small. Maybe you could still make the story text bigger just not as much? And I couldn’t really see much detail with the picture you chose for St. Christine. But other than those two very small things, this is great! I’m definitely waiting to read more of it!

  5. Hi Rachel!
    I like that you emphasize there are different ways to be strong. I think that, especially recently, being strong has become synonymous with being able to fight off opponents. Especially in big movies like Marvel or DC, or any other action movie. However, there is more than one way to be strong, and I like that your stories will recognize that. Your introduction starts off strong! I think you could offer a more in depth glance at who you are going to be talking about but other than that it was very good. I really liked your first story! Changing it to more of a Shrek re-telling was a good idea. It makes it more accessible in a way, because practically everyone knows the story of Shrek but they may not know the story of Saint Christine. What happened to Fiona (Saint Christine) after she was rescued from drowning? Very good story overall!

  6. Hi Rachel!
    I like that you emphasize there are different ways to be strong. I think that, especially recently, being strong has become synonymous with being able to fight off opponents. Especially in big movies like Marvel or DC, or any other action movie. However, there is more than one way to be strong, and I like that your stories will recognize that. Your introduction starts off strong! I think you could offer a more in depth glance at who you are going to be talking about but other than that it was very good. I really liked your first story! Changing it to more of a Shrek re-telling was a good idea. It makes it more accessible in a way, because practically everyone knows the story of Shrek but they may not know the story of Saint Christine. What happened to Fiona (Saint Christine) after she was rescued from drowning? Very good story overall!

  7. Hi Rachel, I enjoyed reading both the introduction and your first story in your storybook! Your introduction does a fantastic job of explaining how exactly your storybook will play by describing exactly what you will be talking about in your stories and how they are all connected. I also really appreciated the links to the women you mention in your introduction as I didn’t know much about them. Moving on to your first story, I really think that linking Saint Christine to Fiona from Shrek is a good move as people are probably more familiar with Shrek. I also really like your inclusion of dialogue as it really helped to portray the personality of the characters in your story. One thing that kind of confused me was the amount of white space at the beginning of the story. I thought that maybe the story wasn’t completed as I couldn’t really see any text. Other than that, I thought that your storybook looks great and I am excited to see what comes next!

  8. Hi Rachel, good job with this storybook so far! I read the introduction and first two stories. I really like the direction you took your topic in—it’s a fun new way to talk about profound historical events. In your introduction, I like how you included links to other websites readers might want to check out, and I like that you’re thinking about doing stories from different cultures. Throughout your storybook, it comes across that you’re very passionate about your topic, and that gets readers more excited too! I saw you had a link to the first story, so maybe add one for the second too and update the introduction with what stories you decide to actually write about. It also might be easier to read if you left-aligned it. I thought both your stories were very creative! Design-wise, make sure each font is the same and decide whether you want to put the author’s note before or after the story. Centering the images in the introduction and first post might help with design too.

  9. Howdy Rachel,
    I grew up on stories of Saints so I was really looking forward to reading through some of your retellings when your story book popped up in the randomizer for this week, and I absolutely loved what you have so far. Starting with your introduction, I appreciated how to-the-point and detailed it is. You let the reader know everything they need to about the upcoming stories in as few words as possible. Concerning the stories themselves, they’re both very well done. I hadn’t heard the story of Saint Christine before, but you did such a good job conveying her story that I didn’t even need to check her Wikipedia page to tell that she was an early church martyr. (It must’ve been mighty frustrating for those Roman officials trying and failing to execute women and men like her so many times, one of my favorites in that vein is Saint Katherine of Alexandria). Your retelling of Esther’s story is also really fun, rivaling even that of the Veggietales version I grew up watching on VHS. The modern twist was great and I think you executed it perfectly. I can’t wait to see What you do with your last story or two!

  10. Hi Rachel! 🙂 Your introduction is really nice and does a good job telling the reader what to expect in your storybook. It’s like reading the ingredients of a certain dish on a menu. It makes you go “ooo… this sounds good.” I also liked the first story and the way you put the author’s note at the beginning instead of the end. I might do that with my stories actually! I’m glad things worked out for Fiona in the end and it really shows how impressively dedicated to God she was to endure all of that. Esther story – YES!! I love/hate the bachelor. What a neat idea. Might I suggest rearranging the sentence “This didn’t bother our sweet heroine until horrible news came to her – she quite liked staying out of the political drama.” to where the text after the hyphen comes earlier? The hyphen after the horrible news implies that her staying out of drama is the horrible news. 🙂 Really good job Rachel! I love your ideas.

  11. Hi Rachel!
    This week for picking the book I had already visited once before, I instantly knew I had to come back and read through your new stories – and I’m so glad that I did! Esther is my favorite character in the Bible for so many reasons. I love what she stands for and how she handled her situation with such grace, and you displayed those aspects so perfectly in your story about her. I LOVE the integration of something more modern like the Bachelor – it fits so well into the story to make a good mash-up of history and today’s world to create a unique and captivating story! You were able to seamlessly bring in aspects of the Bachelor like the rose ceremony, hometowns and the proposal and honeymoon to make a story that seemed completely real. Good job – I’ll definitely be coming back to read your final one!

  12. Hello Rachael!
    It’s super cool to see that you were able to enhance your biblical knowledge a little bit through this storybook. That’s probably one of the things I’m appreciating most about this class and everyone’s projects is that they can gravitate towards what interests them. I’m marginally more infatuated with the Odyssey, but Biblical stories were a super close second so yours was fun to read! I like the variety of art on each page, and depending on the image size they might look better in the page header. The paragraph spacing is great and does a good job of separating conversations which allows for an easier read. You might want to review the font size/style and spacing on each page to possibly clean up the overall aesthetic/flow. Also, the image on the story of “Saint Christine” is aligned on the right side of the page. Might look better center aligned or in a separate textbox. Great stories and overall an attractive blog. Good job!

  13. Hi Rachel!
    You did a fantastic job on your Storybook project! The first time I read your project, you only had the first story up. It was great to see what you added. Changing Esther’s story into The Bachelor was inspired, and it read really well! Your illustrations that you chose are really good as well. They really add something to the story. I also like how you put them in the story instead of just adding them at the bottom of the page. If you did put them at the bottom of the page, it made sense and they did not feel like an afterthought. When we think of strength, I think that we usually think of physical strength instead of mental fortitude. I really like that you show the different kinds of strengths each woman possesses, and how all of them did incredible things with that strength. Great job overall!

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